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Academic Goals And How I Plan To Achieve Them - With A Free Essay Review
What are your academic goals and how do you plan to achieve them?
(150 word limit)
What I lack in sheer talent I make up for with hard work. I have this drive to excel to push past my limits and to reach excellence. Its this drive that has me up till 3 a.m. promising myself Ill read just one more page before going to bed. Because of all this I will be graduating high-school with over 100 college credits I plan to graduate with both a high-school diploma, and an Associates of Arts in Pre-medical science. I plan to attend the University of Miami, through the aid of scholarships, and once there major in Biochemistry. I plan on taking part in the Medical Scholars program, in order to secure myself a place in the University Of Miami Miller School Of Medicine. Ill achieve my goals the only way I know how, through hard work, sleepless nights, and with my drive to be the best I can be.
In my estimation, this is the clearest and best of the essays you've submitted here to date. You get directly to the point, and convey what you need to convey in simple, straightforward, effective prose. The only thing I would query here is whether you've not put things back to front. I wonder, in other words, whether the second half of your essay ("I plan to attend the University of Miami etc.") should not be the first half. There's a natural transition already there between the last sentence and the first.
Submitted by: superman7129
Below are some common scholarship essay questions. You can use these as a great starting point for a pesonal statement. Some of these essay questions are used in the Maricopa Scholarship Database.
- What life experiences have shaped who you are today and what challenges have you overcome in achieving your education (i.e. financial, personal, medical, etc.)?
- Explain why you need financial assistance.
- Describe your academic and career goals and your plans to achieve them and discuss any of your extracurricular/volunteer activities (both on and off campus) that you may perform.
- Describe an event in which you took a leadership role and what you learned about yourself.
This is a sample essay to help guide you when you are writing essays for scholarships. Keep in mind that all scholarship applications are different, so you may have to design your essay to meet those specific requirements.
(State an overview of what you are going to talk about in the essay. If the essay is about you, give a brief description of your experiences, goals, aspirations, family background, etc. Touch on why you want the scholarship.)
For as long as I could remember, I have wanted to be a veterinarian. I have been responsible for the care and feeding of pets ever since I was in the second grade. In high school, I participated in the 4-H club as well as the Junior Humane society. To reach my goals, I realize that I must pursue an eight year college education which will begin with the Fall 2010 semester. I am very excited about my future and feel that with the opportunity your scholarship will provide, I can help many animals.
Paragraph II & III
(Go into more detail on one of the topics listed in paragraph I. For example, elaborate on your previous experiences, family and financial situation, volunteer work, employment, academic career, future goals, college plans, etc.)
My love for animals has been encouraged by my family and friends. I have had the opportunity to volunteer with the local animal shelter and provide basic care to the stray animals. With the help of my biology teacher, I was able to start a 4-H club on campus. Many of the other students on campus developed an interest in the animals and now our club has 100 members. My family also has many animals for which I provide care, including basic needs as well as first aid. I find that I enjoy that aspect of pet ownership best. Unfortunately, my family cannot afford to pay for my entire education, so I hope to use my skills and love of animals to help me pay for college.
(Conclude your essay with a wrap-up of why you should be considered for the scholarship; how do your goals match those of the organization, etc.)
Your organization stands for what I believe in. Like your organization, I hope to help animals for the rest of my life. To reach my goals, I need as much help as possible. I already have the moral support of my family and friends, but that is not quite enough to make my dream come true. I hope that your organization can help me reach this dream by awarding me your scholarship.